a poem i wrote =)

blueZ · **Posted:** Mon Apr 09, 2007 7:34 am

Glass
Human hearts are similar to glass
Some are dirty, some are clean
Some are fragile and some
Break easily into pieces

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its so short its not even a poem
but do tell me what you think.

moogie · **Posts:** 481 **Joined:** Wed Aug 11, 2004 3:51 pm

the grammar of the last line is akward, perhaps if it read:

"Easily broken into pieces" or "Break easily into pieces"

I really do like the line-break between the second to last and last line, its quite subtle and nicely mirrors the whole idea of the poem.

blueZ · **Posted:** Tue Apr 10, 2007 2:46 am

oooh thanks

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