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 Post subject: can someone give me tips on my poem?
PostPosted: Wed Aug 23, 2006 8:45 pm 
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Here it is.

The chickens are comeing, they want your shoe.
but you should not be sad or blue
If you make them your best friends the your shoes wont meat there ends. but if you chase them away they wont want to stay and your shoes will be no more


chickens rock


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PostPosted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 6:34 pm 
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I would suggest making it longer. And don't try to find rymes, write out your first and second line, then try to ryme the ending words!


When Life gives you lemons throw them back and demand chocolate!!


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