Well as part of my GCSE english course I had to write a story as one of my courseworks and I thought that I would post it here to see what you all thought of it.
http://home.1asphost.com/ElectricDj/OriginalWriting.doc
Alternative link:
http://www.savefile.com/files.php?fid=6261670
It was done last year when I was in year 10 (14 yrs old) and I just felt like sharing it because writing stories are the only part of English that I enjoy. I took a few of the things in the story from different places, nothing to do with the storyline though e.g. I copied the cableway idea off FF7, the thing that transports you to the Golden Saucer.
I myself felt that some areas of the story were weak such as the dialogue but I had to cut out a lot of dialogue because my teacher wouldn't allow it to be so long. This meant that I could only use dialogue for crucial scenes which is not what I would have hoped for. Hope you enjoy it.
Oh yeah by the way, I
really couldn't think of a title.